{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"28382063","dateCreated":"1286962771","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/mp09a.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/28382063"},"dateDigested":1532653383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Felicia's News Flashes","description":"Write your news flashes by answering this message.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"28382053","dateCreated":"1286962754","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/mp09a.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/28382053"},"dateDigested":1532653383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Agnes W's News Flashes","description":"Write your news flashes by answering this message.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"28382043","dateCreated":"1286962742","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/mp09a.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/28382043"},"dateDigested":1532653383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Agnes S's News Flashes","description":"Write your news flashes by answering this message.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"31200073","body":"Farm accident, one dead
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\nA 48-year-old woman from Southland died in a farm accident.The accident occurred when the wheat would be moved from one truck to a wheat silo on a farm to Waikaka Valley, near Gore.
\nAlarm service from Gore was called and arrived 9:00.
\nThe accident believe to be a mechanical failure, the woman received head injuries and died at the scene.
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\nhttp:\/\/www.nzherald.co.nz\/nz\/news\/article.cfm?c_id=1&objectid=10692244<\/a>","dateCreated":"1291571511","smartDate":"Dec 5, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"kaaakan","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kaaakan","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"31998763","body":"Agnes, thanks for your text. It is in some ways formal and passive form is used but not through the whole text. Think about phrases like "The accident is believed to be..." instead your phrasing.
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\nHowever, you have passed this part of the project.","dateCreated":"1292936040","smartDate":"Dec 21, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"28382031","dateCreated":"1286962729","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/mp09a.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/28382031"},"dateDigested":1532653383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Linnea S's News Flashes","description":"Write your news flashes by answering this message.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"28382015","dateCreated":"1286962711","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/mp09a.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/28382015"},"dateDigested":1532653383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Ronja's News Flashes","description":"Write your news flashes by answering this message.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"28382009","dateCreated":"1286962698","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/mp09a.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/28382009"},"dateDigested":1532653383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Malin's News Flashes","description":"Write your news flashes by answering this message.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"28381999","dateCreated":"1286962687","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/mp09a.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/28381999"},"dateDigested":1532653383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Lilly's News Flashes","description":"Write your news flashes by answering this message.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"29987103","body":"Loots worth of 55 000 \u00a3 are confiscated from different homes in Edinburgh. Electrical equipment, gold, silver, diamonds and vehicles are among the items that were stolen. Police worked during four weeks with Edinburgh City Council and visited 60 real estates in the town. The thieves are now being arrested and the police have been honoured with five prices on the Scottish Policing Awards.
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\nhttp:\/\/www.dailyrecord.co.uk\/news\/scottish-news\/2010\/11\/05\/19-held-in-fence-swoops-in-edinburgh-86908-22693986\/<\/a>
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\nAn abuse and robbery in Calder occurred 09:30 on the 5th November in the underpass below Calder Road. Mark Shaw, 30, was on his way to work, when suddenly two men knocked him out with a hammer and stole his phone and wallet. No serious injuries were made, but Mark felt shocked. He says himself that the mental side of it all feels worse than the physical, and that he doesn\u2019t feel safe taking the same route to his work anymore. The two men are described to be in their late 20\u2019s and are eastern Europeans.
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\nhttp:\/\/news.scotsman.com\/scotland\/Man-attacked-with-hammer-in.6615457.jp<\/a>
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\nA 16 year old boy has been severely injured in a road crash in south west Scotland. The accident occurred on Tuesday near the Castle Douglas rugby club and the road had to close but was re-opened later that day. The boy was taken to a hospital where he hopefully can make recovery from a suspected neck fracture that he got when the two cars collided. The two other young men who were involved in the accident were also taken to the hospital as a precaution. Information about the crash is needed and police have appealed for witnesses to contact them if they know something.
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\nhttp:\/\/www.bbc.co.uk\/news\/uk-scotland-south-scotland-11725109<\/a>
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\n\/\/Lilly","dateCreated":"1289423188","smartDate":"Nov 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"ScarySponge","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/ScarySponge","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"30703457","body":"Lilly, nice to read your articles. I would like you to rework them and have them posted again. First of all, you do not have any titles on your articles. Most of the text is written in active and\/or present tense. See first page of the Wikispaces site what I require on this assignment.
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\nWhen you write your news flash you must try to use a formal language; passive form, advanced vocabulary and sentence structure, no slang and no contracted forms (it's, don't, can't etc). Also, you must cover the basic and important information of the article; this means that you should make the whole scenario clear to the reader; the five questions who, when, where, where, how should be clear to the reader. Use linking words. Do not forget to write a title and to post the link where you found the news.
\n\/Maria","dateCreated":"1290549400","smartDate":"Nov 23, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"32019715","body":"19 held in fence swoops in Edinburgh
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\nLoots worth of 55 000 \u00a3 are confiscated from different homes in Edinburgh. Electrical equipment, gold, silver, diamonds and vehicles are among the items that were stolen. Police worked during four weeks with Edinburgh City Council and visited 60 real estates in the town. The thieves are now being arrested and the police are being honoured with five prices on the Scottish Policing Awards.
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\nhttp:\/\/www.dailyrecord.co.uk\/news\/scottish-news\/2010\/11\/05\/19-held-in-fence-swoops-in-edinburgh-86908-22693986\/<\/a>
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\nMan attacked with hammer in latest underpass assault
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\nAn abuse and robbery in Calder occurred 09:30 on the 5th November in the underpass below Calder Road. Mark Shaw, 30, was on his way to work, when suddenly two men knocked him out with a hammer and stole his phone and wallet. No serious injuries were made, but Mark feels shocked. He says himself that the mental side of it all feels worse than the physical, and that he does not feel safe taking the same route to his work anymore. The two men are described to be in their late 20\u2019s and are eastern Europeans.
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\nhttp:\/\/news.scotsman.com\/scotland\/Man-attacked-with-hammer-in.6615457.jp<\/a>
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\nBoy, 16, seriously hurt in Castle Douglas road crash
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\nA road crash occurred in south west Scotland which caused a boy to be severely injured. The accident occurred on Tuesday near the Castle Douglas rugby club and the road had to close but was re-opened later that day. The boy was taken to a hospital where he hopefully can make recovery from a suspected neck fracture that he got when the two cars collided. The two other young men who were involved in the accident were also taken to the hospital as a precaution. Information about the crash is needed and police have appealed for witnesses to contact them if they know something.
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\nhttp:\/\/www.bbc.co.uk\/news\/uk-scotland-south-scotland-11725109<\/a>","dateCreated":"1292975983","smartDate":"Dec 21, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"ScarySponge","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/ScarySponge","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"32020475","body":"Hi again Maria. I corrected it a third time because I felt like it was needed. I hope it is okay now.
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\n19 held in fence swoops in Edinburgh
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\nLoots worth of 55 000 \u00a3 are confiscated from different homes in Edinburgh. Items such as electrical equipment, gold, silver, diamonds and vehicles have been stolen. During four weeks the police have been working with Edinburgh City Council and have visited 60 real estates in the town to recover the stolen loot and to find the culprits. The thieves are now found and arrested. The police are being honoured for their work with five prices on the Scottish Policing Awards.
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\nhttp:\/\/www.dailyrecord.co.uk\/news\/scottish-news\/2010\/11\/05\/19-held-in-fence-swoops-in-edinburgh-86908-22693986\/<\/a>
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\nMan attacked with hammer in latest underpass assault
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\nAn abuse and robbery in Calder occurred 09:30 on the 5th November in the underpass below Calder Road. The victim Mark Shaw, 30, was knocked out by a hammer by two men on his way to work. His phone and wallet were stolen. No serious injuries were made, but Mark feels shocked. He says himself that the mental side of it all feels worse than the physical, and that he does not feel safe taking the same route to his work anymore. The two men are described to be in their late 20\u2019s and are eastern Europeans.
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\nhttp:\/\/news.scotsman.com\/scotland\/Man-attacked-with-hammer-in.6615457.jp<\/a>
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\nBoy, 16, seriously hurt in Castle Douglas road crash
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\nA road crash occurred in south west Scotland which caused a boy to be severely injured. The accident occurred on Tuesday near the Castle Douglas rugby club and the road had to close but was re-opened later that day. The boy is currently at a hospital where he hopefully can make recovery from a suspected neck fracture that he got when the two cars collided. The two other young men who were involved in the accident are also taken to the hospital as a precaution. Information about the crash is needed and police have appealed for witnesses to contact them if they know something.
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\nhttp:\/\/www.bbc.co.uk\/news\/uk-scotland-south-scotland-11725109<\/a>","dateCreated":"1292977623","smartDate":"Dec 21, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"ScarySponge","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/ScarySponge","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"32477598","body":"Lilly, your texts are ok, you've passed the assignment.
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\n\/MAria","dateCreated":"1294673678","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"28381995","dateCreated":"1286962676","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/mp09a.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/28381995"},"dateDigested":1532653384,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Matilda's News Flashes","description":"Write your news flashes by answering this message.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"29956153","body":"It is much traffic jams in Florida Keys in south USA now. The Rita storm come closer now and people in Miami are terrified of the latest news. The hurricane is on way to Miami, and 2,3 million people is hysterical what should happen with them. The Police call that everyone should find protection.
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\nwww.sydsvenskan.se","dateCreated":"1289400332","smartDate":"Nov 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"matildanilssonb","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/matildanilssonb","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"30701945","body":"Matilda, you need to post the site where you found your article! Anyway, your writing is too short, take a look at the grammar in your text, write in a formal language and last, name the article, preferably after the real title of the article you have found.
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\nPost again!
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\n\/Maria","dateCreated":"1290547457","smartDate":"Nov 23, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"30702477","body":"Some more thoughts before posting again;
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\nRework your text and think about these things. Think about formal language with a passive form. See to that you cover the most important things of your article. Also, think about making the whole scenario clear to the reader; the five questions who, when, where, where, how should be clear to the reader.
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\n\/Maria","dateCreated":"1290548085","smartDate":"Nov 23, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"28381981","dateCreated":"1286962665","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/mp09a.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/28381981"},"dateDigested":1532653384,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Lizette's News Flashes","description":"Write your news flashes by answering this message.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"28381973","dateCreated":"1286962651","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/mp09a.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/28381973"},"dateDigested":1532653385,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Amanda's News Flashes","description":"Write your news flashes by answering this message.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"29700293","body":"In Northern Ireland a man were taken and the kidnappers requested a ransom. Several of men entered the 30-year-olds house in Kemmilhill Gardens, Randalstown, Co Antrim around 1am on Friday. He was alone at the time and was taken in his silver BMW car to another place.
\nSoon after, the money was demanded from family members. Later on he was released from the BMW car in the Armoy areas. The man walked then into his house in Armoy and raised the alarm that he was there. They have not yet found his car. The detectives discovered the BMW at Manister Road, Armoy after investing a report about it. The car had been burned up in a fire.
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\nAmanda Lagesson
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\nhttp:\/\/www.independent.ie\/breaking-news\/national-news\/man-kidnapped-in-co-antrim-ordeal-2408779.html<\/a>","dateCreated":"1288964161","smartDate":"Nov 5, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"mandie100","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mandie100","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1289223303\/mandie100-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"29700363","body":"The Police have said that the man is feared to have fled from the Irish Republic with his mother's dead body. The authorities in Ireland believed the son was in his 60s and was from South of England and have been living in Kenmare, Co Kerry, for the past two year. On Thursday The County Coroners warned him that he must bury or cremate his mother, who died in September. After October 14 the offices got knowledge from a Garda spokesman that the man had been living with his mother\u2019s body in a rented house in town.
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\nAmanda Lagesson
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\nhttp:\/\/www.independent.ie\/breaking-news\/national-news\/man-flees-with-mothers-dead-body-2409334.html<\/a>","dateCreated":"1288964211","smartDate":"Nov 5, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"mandie100","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mandie100","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1289223303\/mandie100-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"30211911","body":"Hi Amanda
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\nNice to read your news flashes.
\nAbout the first one:
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\nThink about passive voice, like:
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\n"In Northern Ireland a man were taken and a ransom has been requested by the kidnappers. The 30-year-old man's house in Kemmilhill Gardens, Randalstown, Co Antrim were entered by several men entered around 1am on Friday."
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\nGood that you are using linking words like "Soon after, Later on".
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\nAbout the second news flash:
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\nThe very first phrase is not properly introduced "The Police have said that the man..." What man? It needs to be clarified first.
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\nAlso, here in this news flash you could have used the passive voice more.
\n\/Maria","dateCreated":"1289838998","smartDate":"Nov 15, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"30702615","body":"I would like you to rework your article and post it again. Here are some more thoughts before posting again;
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\nRework your text and think about these things. Think about formal language with a passive form. See to that you cover the most important things of your article. Also, think about making the whole scenario clear to the reader; the five questions who, when, where, where, how should be clear to the reader.
\n
\n\/Maria","dateCreated":"1290548302","smartDate":"Nov 23, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"30850829","body":"In Northern Ireland a man were taken and a ransom was requested by the kidnappers. The 30-year-olds house in Kemmilhill Gardens, Randalstown, Co Antrim were entered by several men around 1am on Friday. The man was alone at the time and was taken in his silver BMW car to another place.
\nSoon after, the kidnappers demanded money from family members. Later on they released the man from the BMW car in the Armoy areas. They have not yet found his car but then when the detectives discovered the BMW at Manister Road, Armoy it had been burned up in a fire.","dateCreated":"1291038664","smartDate":"Nov 29, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"mandie100","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mandie100","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1289223303\/mandie100-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"31998405","body":"Amanda, this looks much better. Half of your text (the first) is formal and the latter part could have been more formal but it is well written anyway. You have passed this part of the project.
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\nMaria","dateCreated":"1292934476","smartDate":"Dec 21, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"MariaFrojdEngstrom","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MariaFrojdEngstrom","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1236707106\/MariaFrojdEngstrom-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}